Friday, October 24, 2014

Something That is Mine

  A name that belongs to me,
but not exclusively
a name common enough that when called aloud,
a few heads turn all at once

I am the stone
the weight that keeps everything down
I am the mountain
she is the wind

I never thought it to be special
it would blend in and disappear completely
as if it were never there
a name engulfed in darkness
it's teeth bared and shining through 
keeping people away

"oh how nice it'd be,"
I thought
"to have someone stay here with me for a while"
"because is my name really mine,"
"if there is no one to call me by it ?"

When people say it
they sing it sweetly like a song
but I'd much rather sing a different song
because, you see
I don't like this one very much

A name that floats freely
and blooms
like the gardens you'd dream about
their sweet aroma caressing each letter
until it's spelled out
"Sierra"


metaphor
personification
alliteration

11 comments:

  1. I like it ALOT it's very thoughtful and sort of deep

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  2. Sierra,
    You did a fantastic job creating imagery and voice! Keep up the hard work.

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  3. The detail you have put into your poem is very nice. I love how you considered yourself a stone

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  4. I enjoyed your poem didn't notice any mistakes and great poetic devices.

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  5. I like your metaphors "I am the stone" and "she is the wind" that's very creative. Nice poem good job !

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  6. You had a lot of emotion in your poem and you used the devices cleverly

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  7. I like it. You put a lot emotion into it and that's what a poem is all about. I like how you compared it to a sweet song but you rather be singing a different song. That was my favorite part.

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  8. Really liked that you made it into a poem not many others did, love your use of poetic devices

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  9. I liked how you compared yourself to a stone and talked about how your name is very common.

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  10. I also liked your metaphors very deep and thoughtful with your name good J.O.B

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