A name that belongs to me,
but not exclusively
a name common enough that when called aloud,
a few heads turn all at once
I am the stone
the weight that keeps everything down
I am the mountain
she is the wind
I never thought it to be special
it would blend in and disappear completely
as if it were never there
a name engulfed in darkness
it's teeth bared and shining through
keeping people away
"oh how nice it'd be,"
I thought
"to have someone stay here with me for a while"
"because is my name really mine,"
"if there is no one to call me by it ?"
When people say it
they sing it sweetly like a song
but I'd much rather sing a different song
because, you see
I don't like this one very much
A name that floats freely
and blooms
like the gardens you'd dream about
their sweet aroma caressing each letter
until it's spelled out
"Sierra"
metaphor
personification
alliteration
I like it ALOT it's very thoughtful and sort of deep
ReplyDeleteSierra,
ReplyDeleteYou did a fantastic job creating imagery and voice! Keep up the hard work.
The detail you have put into your poem is very nice. I love how you considered yourself a stone
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your poem didn't notice any mistakes and great poetic devices.
ReplyDeleteI like your metaphors "I am the stone" and "she is the wind" that's very creative. Nice poem good job !
ReplyDeletePretty poem. I love it.^u^
ReplyDeleteYou had a lot of emotion in your poem and you used the devices cleverly
ReplyDeleteI like it. You put a lot emotion into it and that's what a poem is all about. I like how you compared it to a sweet song but you rather be singing a different song. That was my favorite part.
ReplyDeleteReally liked that you made it into a poem not many others did, love your use of poetic devices
ReplyDeleteI liked how you compared yourself to a stone and talked about how your name is very common.
ReplyDeleteI also liked your metaphors very deep and thoughtful with your name good J.O.B
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